These sandals are my favorite. One reason is the memory foam. The memory foam molds to your foot's shape so that no part of your foot is feeling too much pressure. It makes walking in the sandals as comfortable as tennis shoes, but without the heat. Another reason is the design. The simple white lines and a Nike logo are eye catching while not looking too colorful and "pizzazy". A final reason that these sandals are awesome is that every time they get dirty, they seem to wash themselves as the dust slowly disappears from the sandals. The only downside of these Nike sandals is that the memory foam absorbs water. After the memory foam is soaked, every step you take in these sandals makes a squishy sound and emits many little bubbles which makes your feet slightly uncomfortable. But of course, that doesn't happen too often, so the sandals are usually very comfortable and easy to wear. For only $40, you can't go wrong with these amazing sandals.
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ReplyDelete"One reason is the memory foam. The memory foam molds to your foot's shape so that no part of your foot is feeling too much pressure." You put the words "memory foam" too close to each other here. Revise to: "First of all, the memory foam molds to your foot's shape so that it doesn't feel too much pressure."
"...are eye catching while not looking too colorful and "pizzazy" should be changed to "are eye catching but not too colorful or pizzazy"
You have to simplify this sentence: "After the memory foam is soaked, every step you take in these sandals makes a squishy sound and emits many little bubbles which makes your feet slightly uncomfortable. " Maybe change to "After the memory foam is soaked, every step makes a squishy sound, with little bubbles that make your feet uncomfortable."
The last sentence is strangely worded. Revise. Say it out loud to yourself.
Otherwise, very nicely written - I could see your train of thought very well.
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