I watched http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5JKIZ7j20EA, and the sound wasn’t clear, so I also read http://teachingamericanhistory.org/library/index.asp?document=147.
“””””As for the second sentence, "He made many songs such as The Sad Song, The Turn, and many others, which are all made using the same method." <----Say this out loud to yourself. It's somewhat awkward. Part of assignment for tomorrow: how would you revise this sentence?””””” He made many songs such as The Sad Song, and the turn, which are made using the same method.
Ronald Regan was a very great president. When he was president of our country, there were no economic problems, or wars. It was peaceful. His speech he made on the space shuttle Challenger's crash shows just how great a man he is.
If someone didn’t listen to the speech and just watched him talk, that person could tell the solemnity and the seriousness of his speech. Regan’s arm don’t move wildly like he is trying to explain something, he is not smiling crazily, and he has many pauses during his speech. Now when the viewer does listen to him, but don’t listen to his words, the viewer can hear the pauses, his very calm and relaxing voice, and the viewer will know that he is very solemn and respectful. Regan’s tone and body language earns much respect among viewers.
If you did anything that I said above, then you missed the best part, the actual speech. His words are very inspirational and organized. These words could influence anyone on earth that actually cares about other people’s welfare. He started with telling the viewer that a few very brave astronauts died in the Challenger Shuttle explosion, and that we should mourn them. Then, he relates to the astronaut’s families. He comforts them and tells them that the astronauts did great things and helped advance our scientific knowledge, and they helped the world become a better place. Then, he said that we will still continue space exploration because it is a very important step to advance into the future. He assures us that we’re not sending people to their deaths by sending them into space with rockets that haven’t been tested. He said, “I know it is hard to understand, but sometimes painful things like this happen. It’s all part of taking a chance and expanding man’s horizons. The future doesn’t belong to the fainthearted; it belongs to the brave. The Challenger crew was pulling us into the future, and we’ll continue to follow them.” Then, he explains to the school children that the astronauts died for a good cause. And finally, he talks about NASA’s dedication to the citizens, and wraps it up.
This speech was very moving. It made me want to visit the astronauts grave, and it made me want to become an astronaut myself. This is one of the best speeches I have ever heard, and I have heard many.
I won't be able to get back to you until tonight on something in depth on this post, but here's today's assignment:
ReplyDeleteYou are to research moral philosophy and the problem of ethics. Look up objective morality, subjective morality, moral absolutism, and moral universalism. Respond to the question, "How do you know that an action is morally right or wrong?"
Also, looking at this sentence, "Ronald Regan was a very great president. When he was president of our country, there were no economic problems, or wars. It was peaceful." <--- Okay, sure, but do you really believe this, or was this really just written as filler because you had nothing else to say? You can state whatever opinions you want, but you need to back them up. What about the end stages of the Cold War, the economic stagflation of the time, the Iran-Contra affair, and air-traffic controller's strike? All of those were in Reagan's Presidency. Put some heart into what you write - don't just go with the first thing that comes to mind.
"He made many songs such as The Sad Song, and the turn, which are made using the same method." <----Change to "He made many songs such as The Sad Song and The Turn using the same method.
ReplyDeleteFirst, it's spelled "Reagan," not "Regan."
Hm.... Of the last three posts, you've always, without fail, been completely and absolutely positive. Now, this isn't such a bad thing in of itself, but you also need to know how to say things other than "that was great" and "that was wonderful."
"Now when the viewer does listen to him, but don’t listen to his words, the viewer can hear the pauses, his very calm and relaxing voice, and the viewer will know that he is very solemn and respectful." <---- Say this out loud; it's kind of awkward. When the viewer "listens to him, but doesn't listen to him"? Try changing to "When the viewer pays attention to his body language rather than his words, he can hear the pauses, the calm and relaxed voice that inspires a feeling of solemnity and respect.
"If you did anything that I said above, then you missed the best part, the actual speech." <---Change to: "Body language aside, his actual speech was a thing of beauty." Or something like that. Exact wording is up to you, and is a matter of personal preference.
"These words could influence anyone on earth that actually cares about other people’s welfare." <----Change? Maybe, "They influence the viewers, and bring home the tragedy and loss of the Challenger Shuttle.
"This is one of the best speeches I have ever heard, and I have heard many." <---Maybe, "Out of all the speeches I have heard, this was one of the most moving and well-delivered." Please be more specific than just "best"! Way say it was "good," when you can describe it as "well-executed" or "eloquent" or "shabby" or "sophisticated" or "mellow" or "shallow" or "deep" or "moving"?
How's your reading and your thoughts on the 1000 word essays coming along?