There was a few things that motivated me to get this goal. My main motivation for the first part of my goal was that there are so many yo-yos everywhere and I just want to play with all of them, just to see what they're like. The second part of my goal was started because I watched a few yo-yo videos, and the whole time I was thinking, "I want to be like them someday." It would be nice not having to do anything but yo-yo for money.
My plan to achieve this goal is pretty obvious. I would earn money to buy yo-yos of all sorts. With those yo-yo's I would practice a bunch of tricks and go to contests to earn even more yo-yos. It is a cycle that repeats itself and, eventually, completes my goal.
These are the the motivations and plans for my goal.
Um... Okay. I suppose I should have seen it coming, that you were going to write about yo yo's, but eh... sure.
ReplyDeleteYou want to start off with a good opening "A lot of people have a goal in life" is very generic and doesn't need stating. What about "Ever since I was little, I have always been fascinated by yo yo's."
"It would be nice not having to do anything but yo-yo for money." <--- Change to: it would be nice to just yo yo for a living.
"My plan to achieve this goal is pretty obvious." There's an art to be had in subtlety. Don't just state things outright - don't just say, "This is my plan." You can start off with "It won't be easy, but..." or "Yo-yo's aren't cheap to come by, so first I would..."
Tomorrow, write about anything you want: just make it two paragraphs and interesting!